I dunno, I think that in the fifth paragraph, the author got lost and started flailing about with the third thesis' conclusion.
Sayonara
Whatever happened to beginning, middle, and end?
"There are no finger prints under water."
Less use of CAPITAL'S more use of punctuation.
REMEMBER They're = They ARE Going to work. not, Their going to work {incorrect}
The Great Kazoo's Feedback
"when you're happy you enjoy the melody but, when you're broken you understand the lyrics".
That danged ol bczandm doesn't post much, but boy when he does...
You guys are hilarious!
Every time someone posts something from email rather than attachment or web url I think God kills a kitten. STOP DOING IT! Think of the innocent little kitttens!!!![]()
"There is no news in the truth, and no truth in the news."
"The revolution will not be televised... Instead it will be filmed from multiple angles via cell phone cameras, promptly uploaded to YouTube, Tweeted about, and then shared on Facebook, pending a Wi-Fi connection."
tl;dr
What is my joy if all hands, even the unclean, can reach into it? What is my wisdom, if even the fools can dictate to me? What is my freedom, if all creatures, even the botched and impotent, are my masters? What is my life, if I am but to bow, to agree and to obey?
-- Ayn Rand, Anthem (Chapter 11)
I think it was very direct plagiarism of a more known author.
"The rifle itself has no moral stature, since it has no will of its own. Naturally, it may be used by evil men for evil purposes, but there are more good men than evil, and while the latter cannot be persuaded to the path of righteousness by propaganda, they can certainly be corrected by good men with rifles. --Jeff Cooper"
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