Grammar Gurus: proof read this phrase.

[Irving]

Dr_Fwd and Sharpienads are the closest so far. Starting with Sniper's post though, you guys have started leaving out parts of the phrase that are actually there.

Good work everyone, I'm pretty impressed so far. Much better than I could have done.

[cowboykjohnson]

It are good to read to me as it already are; perfection ifin ya wanna call it what it are!

here I'll try

cows, sheep, goats, pigs and corn + mesoamericas =

Turkeys and dogs + mesoamericas =

[Dr_Fwd]

That's pretty good, but I think the colon should be a semi-colon and take out the commas around the word perhaps.

"The situation in Mesoamerica contrasts strongly; that area provided only two domesticable animals (the turkey and the dog), whose meat yield was far lower than that of cows, sheep, goats, and pigs, and corn, Mesoamerica's staple grain, was difficult to domesticate and perhaps slow to develop."

I can't explain it in English but I 'm pretty sure about that colon.
And I think you are right about "perhaps".
Also this part is kinda confuses me "... goats, and pigs, and corn, Mesoamerica's.... " i think there're too many "and" or there should be something different after the "and pigs".

[mcantar18c]

The situation in Mesoamerica contrasts strongly. That area, provided only two domesticable animals, the turkey and the dog, whose meat yield was far lower than that of cows, sheep, goats, and pigs (and corn, Mesoamerica's staple grain) was, as I've already explained, difficult to domesticate and perhaps slow to develop.

[mcantar18c]

I can't explain it in English but I 'm pretty sure about that colon.
And I think you are right about "perhaps".
Also this part is kinda confuses me "... goats, and pigs, and corn, Mesoamerica's.... " i think there're too many "and" or there should be something different after the "and pigs".

I didn't catch that thing with the pigs until I tried to edit it. Putting parentheses around the corn bit is the only way I can make sense of it without changing words.

[Irving]

You guys are doing a good job working it out and bringing up the right places to look at so far.

[Dr_Fwd]

I didn't catch that thing with the pigs until I tried to edit it. Putting parentheses around the corn bit is the only way I can make sense of it without changing words.

I know! Thanks to Irving I'm gonna have a sleepless night!

Irving, at least give me a name of the dam* book.

[Dr_Fwd]

You guys are doing a good job working it out and bringing up the right places to look at so far.

So you're sure there're that many "and"?

[Irving]

Yep, there are that many "ands" in the phrase.

I double checked and found one mistake that I made, but it hasn't affected anything thus far. The "so" at the end, should be "slow." Sorry about that guys.

[Dr_Fwd]

Yep, there are that many "ands" in the phrase.

I double checked and found one mistake that I made, but it hasn't affected anything thus far. The "so" at the end, should be "slow." Sorry about that guys.

LOL, I've actually read that as "slow"! I didn't even saw that mistake!